Poverty Letter

Yesterday I wrote a letter on poverty. It was to try to convince people to take action and solve this HUGE problem in Hong Kong.

I knew that poverty was a very serious problem even before we started. I have done a similar type of work in the past, when we wrote to Mr. Baird about the wifi problem.

I was satisfied by the fact that I finished it very quickly, and that I wrote a lot in a very little time. My standards were that I could write 6 paragraphs as quick as possible, and the paragraphs need to be detailed. I met my standards, and I was pretty formal and respectful as well.

I had the same main point as my classmates, but I did not have the same reasons. My reasons were pretty unique, like the one that says you can afford it. I gave a lot of facts in my work.

The goal I would set for myself next time is to research more before I write the piece. I might want help with this, because this time I did it with my group. I would like to improve on my note taking skills as well, as it will help me research.

Sentence Fluency Extension

Sentence Fluency Extension

I have a friend named Kevin. He lives in Canada with his mom, and sometimes his dad. He loves video games, but he also really likes sports. I know this because once I saw him climb to the top of a very high and steep rock. I think he likes outdoor activities more. He likes climbing a lot of things, including things at the playground, mountains, trees, and big rocks. He likes to play all kinds of jokes, including ones related to water, trees, and climbing. I think the funniest one he ever played is the one where he built a huge snow platform-like thing and told his mom to step on it, but the inside was hollow! His energy could probably last for about a few hours, if you don’t count him drinking water and stuff like that. Kevin is one of the best friends I ever had, and will have.

Sentence Fluency

Sentence Fluency

I have a kitten named Snowball. She is furry and white, and she has a black paw. She really likes to play with yarn by pulling it across the room, but that makes a big mess. Snowball likes to climb trees, but one time she got stuck. She had trouble getting down, and she only managed it after a while.Snowball got sick once, but I took care of her. After a while, she got better.

I Survived Narrative

Chapter 1

 

The sky became dark as it started to hail. 12 year old Peter was safe inside the classroom having math class. Then suddenly, he heard a loud roar. It sounded like a train.

Peter saw a column of spinning air touch the ground. Peter knew that it was a tornado right when he saw it. “Not an ordinary tornado”, he recalled from the news reporter’s words. Peter knew this was an F5 tornado.

The teacher dismissed everyone in the class, telling them to run home and hide form the tornado. But Peter knew that his home was not safe enough, as it was in line with the school. That meant his house would be hit too.

When he got home, he saw Max, his brother, already hiding in the basement. Not only his brother was down there, but also his parents. “Quick! Get down here, Peter!” But before Peter could even move, his father grabbed him by the sleeve, and pulled him into the basement.

About 30 seconds later, the tornado ripped the roof of the little brick house. It was like a vacuum cleaner, but one that could suck up humans!! Max was thrown into the air, spinning around and around…

 

Chapter 2

 

“Get up Peter, You’ll be late for school!” Mom shouted. Peter did not want to get up for 3 reasons. 1 was that he had stayed up late watching the news last night. 2 was that the news reporter said there might be a tornado today!! 3 was that he and his parents had to put together a disaster kit last night for today’s possible tornado. His mother had said that was their only hope of surviving.

After he finished his breakfast, he started walking to the school he went to together with his brother Max. It was a stormy day, so Peter wished his dad had time to drive him to school today.

Their school was just a plain grey building with 2 floors. Peter’s classroom had a single bookshelf that held about 50 books, a plain light that flickered, producing the only light in the classroom, and a rack where all of the students hang their coats. Peter decided to read a book while he waited for class to start.

 

Chapter 3

 

Peter was wearing a green coat with white pockets. He and his dad were up this late at night to watch the news. The news reporter talked about the weather tomorrow. “Tomorrow might bring us a tornado. And not just an ordinary tornado, an F5 tornado.” Peter repeated those words in his mind. An F5 tornado.

This area of Tornado Alley had hardly ever had an F5 tornado, so everyone in the family was really surprised. Peter knew that before he was born, there had been F5 tornadoes every single year, but now, there were no F5 tornadoes.
“We need to put together a disaster kit. It’s the only hope of surviving this F5 tornado.” Mom said. “If we don’t, we’ll all not survive.” Dad added. Peter helped his parents put together a disaster kit. He wondered what tomorrow might bring.

 

Chapter 4 (continuing chapter 1)

 

Max’s leg was broken from the fall when he had escaped the tornadoes pull. He was on the hospital bed. Peter and his friend Daniel had decided to visit him. Daniel had saved Peter and his family when their house was torn apart.

Peter had thought everyone in his family would die when Daniel and his family had saved them. It was a hard job to do in the midst of the tornado, but somehow Daniel and his parents had managed it.

Max’s leg had something wrapped around his leg. Peter was a careful person, and he never had any injuries, so he never went to the hospital. That is why he didn’t recognize the thing that was wrapped around Max’s leg.

Peter thanked his friend Daniel and decided to eat something. But, he went home first.

 

THE END

An Organized Showing and Telling Paragraph

An Organized Showing and Telling Paragraph

I saw the grey building from very far away. I needed to climb it to get to my friend’s high apartment. I knew it was at the top of the building. I climbed for what seemed like hours. The building seemed to go on forever, and when I quickly took a careful peek outside, I was higher than any other building!! After a few more floors, I finally reached the top. When I came back down, I waited slowly for the elevator, and I took the elevator back down. The building was tall.