One Night In The House
On a dark and scary Halloween night, there was a girl named Ashley, she was 12, she had silky black hair, shiny pouted lips, long legs, and shiny eyes. She and her friends went to a party and found an abandoned house. The abandoned house was full of broken glass, cobwebs and maybe even bloodstains on the window.
At first, she was very scared, but then her friends dared her and said that they would pay her 50 bucks just to get in the house. She went in and it was dark, she heard howling, creeks from the floor as she walked into a room in the house. She saw a guy with a knife and a mask that looked like JigSaws face from the movie Saw, which had a white face and had swirls on the cheeks…it’s too scary to describe, Lets just name him the “Wannabe JigSaw Guy.” Well, the Wannabe JigSaw Guy was running and hiding for no reason, and then he stopped moving.
She went in the room and leaned against the door for awhile just to catch her breath, and smelled an aroma that was coming from the closet. She looked around the room and saw a mirror with red writing on it, Ashley looked on the ground and was relieved when she saw lipstick. She quickly looked back up at the mirror and read the writing, it said…
“I’m outside the door, killed 1, 2, 3, 4 people … and now it’s gonna be you.”
Ashley was so scared she was wondering who could that guy be, she tried to text or call her friend but there was no signal.
“HELP! Emmy? Hannah? Ariana? ANYONE?” she screamed.
She didn’t want to go out because she was scared that she would see the freaky weirdo again. She quietly tiptoed out of the room. She spotted the front door of the abandoned house and quickly ran to it, she didn’t care how much sound she made; she just tried to open the front door, but it just wouldn’t open.
She looked behind her to check if there was anybody there, then she looked back at the door…the door was open. She ran out and saw 5 people dressed in black a few feet away, she thought they were her friends.
“Emmy? Hannah? Charice? Ariana?” she shouted out.
The five people dressed in black turned around and it wasn’t her friends, it was people with their scary mask and the knife….
They slowly walk towards her….
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{ 20 comments… read them below or add one }
Nice story…
Are you talking about me?
Good golly! I was really freaked out by that part when the scary masked guy turned around.
I like your story your gramer is good to
-Connor
Awesome story so far!
I really hope to hear more of your story! It’s really interesting. I hope that you will post part 2 soon.
I like the ending.
Julia
I really like the story but don’t you think it’s going too fast?
I like your story.
May
I wonder what will happen later on…
Like your story so far.
-Rose
I also liked the ending since you gave the readers a mysterious ending. Though this sentence “She saw a guy with a knife and a mask running and hiding from her, that guy stopped moving.” didn’t really make sense… though you just changed it.
- Sharita
I would really like to read the second part of it!
I think you wrote a great story, and you left a great hook!
-Alison
Your story is SO good! It’s a really nice cliffhanger you kept here. I can’t wait to read more next week!
Nicole
Absolutely LOVE your story! Can’t wait to read more of it! It gives the reader a good exciting grip too!
Very interesting, I wonder what happened next!
why red head?
Why do you want to have red hair? The dye might not be healthy (chemicals).
It is a nice interesting story. Some parts kinda sound like PLL
-Atiya
Nice story so far!